Argument Peer Review - Puyush

In Puyush’s introduction of the argumentative essay, Puyush catches the reader’s attention and compels the reader’s interest in his issue by stating his thesis directly in front of the readers which is that computers are best device for education and learning. Puyush’s introduction lacks in providing necessary background; however, since we could not use outside source, it is considerable. Other than that, the introduction of Puyush’s argumentative essay sufficiently describes what the controversy or problems surrounding the issue which would be computer’s harmful effect on human’s health for a long term and people’s lack of socialness due to long term usage of computers. In general, his essay is lead logically, smoothly, and directly to the thesis. Puyush does not clearly map out the solution in the introduction; however, there is some type of solution in the conclusion part. Upon reading Puyush’s introduction, the issue found out to be both interesting and contestable. The main body of Puyush’s essay flesh out its main points with reasonable logic such as the convenience of our modern technology, various application of modern technology in almost every aspect of lives. Puyush uses his personal experience to support his claim on main points; his experiences were more easily related to the wide audience and not felt overly subjective. Puyush also mentions the possible counter arguments for his issue in his introduction; however, he does not refute the possible opposing claims in his essay. Overall Puyush restates his thesis with more details without directly rewriting the thesis, and his essay contained variety of word and phrase choices and have negligible grammar and spelling issues with good transitions.